mother
Your breasts look so beautiful in this light. I swear, I can’t take my eyes off you. Can I approach you? May I share the same light that makes you glow just for a second? Don’t move away, stand right here. You smell earthy. Turn a bit like this, now look up. No, look as if you’re looking at something outside the window. A little bit more up, a little bit more…Oh God, I can’t bear the visual of your body. Just give me a second. Fuck, look at the way your stomach muscles are working to carry all that weight, the weight of the world. I think I need some water. Where did I find you? You magnificent, radiant creature. Don’t be nervous, I know I’m staring. I wonder what you taste like. There is a slight fragrance of plant in the room, is it you? Maybe it’s the life inside you. Now put your arms behind your head, show me a frontal without any protrusions but your stomach and your breasts. Sit down and open your legs, put your heels on the chair. How swollen you are. I can see you are already really wet, it’s almost time for you to cast the weight.
You are beautiful, mother.
April 19th, 2008 at 11:43 pm
wow
April 21st, 2008 at 3:14 pm
I asked a few people the following question via e-mail, attaching the piece above, “Mother”.
question: do you think writing should always have a subtlety to be good writing? or can it be raw and still be good?
1: I’m not too good on giving advice about what works and what doesn’t… the only thing I can say besides go with what you’re comfortable with, what comes naturally, is I feel that sometimes forcing one’s hand… making a piece deliberately hard-hitting undermines the writing. Not that there’s anything wrong with the piece below… it is good and intriguing, just be careful maybe of trying too hard to shock… many people become disaffected… Subtlety works as part of a natural style, but hard-hitting pieces are good too. Try always to strike a balance between the two…
2: hey ce
i don’t think it does
your piece is amazing, i love it
ive never liked subtlety nearly as much as i love writing that is direct and immediate
you’re a great writer
love love
3: I think its stunning
4: raw does not automatically exclude subtlety. the subtlety can be ‘the moment’
you write, the here and now, now, right now. That is the poem. Not ‘just now’, or
this morning.
5: there are two things that are in play when one writes…subtly is one but more importantly its beauty of words that make metaphors into sentences that create narration. whomever decided to write this, if it is someone who is writing..deliberate or innocently decided to mix it up and create a degree of uncertain voicing.
meaning one feels like it is implying one thing, raw styled and is being about another, being respectful, being about celebration.
Sometimes the two never mix and the uneasiness is guised and is presented as in this in a manner that is neither subtle raw or even good. thus, the narrator becomes a number of things, an anxious lover, a pornographer a director fill it in.. and in doing so .. we are relieved in the end to find that i is about a man an expectant mother .. however the manner of writing to honor her is suspened to be raw sexual.. rather than simply subtle..i wonder how you taste, are you the taste of sun and the raw sunsets of a dusty desert or the exotic ray of a beach layered with sun and surf. Can i taste your raw breath, the joy of my own hand on your soul clapping you to higher heights of xtc.
here the narrator dears to give action, and motion to his notion of want and desire hinting to his own acting out fantasy..
6: i really think that is a silly question!!
this is COMPLETELY arresting. it re-inscribes beauty and wonder and sexiness onto the body of a mother, so often viewed as a freakshow or gross distortion or just a storage vessel. i love it!
7: That’s pretty raw and its good. Is this your biological mother? You sure you’re straight?